Draft Revision for Story Synopsis #1

After meeting with my thesis adviser, Mike C. earlier this week, we both agreed that since the central message of the story is littering, making changes to the story so the creature arises from the environment would add to the realism of the experience. In other words the context of the story is about littering, and it would add to the realism if the creature was a) something affected by the environment, or b) a product of the environment. And then it hit me!
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Lionel Essrog is having one of those days where nothing seems to go right. After nearly getting ran over by a passing motorist, he spills his morning coffee on his shirt. Not wanting to appear unprofessional during his meeting, unsuccessfully he tries to remove the stain. However, carelessly he discards the napkin onto the ground.

Disgusted by the gross display of littering, a pigeon lands in front of Lionel. Naturally, he thinks nothing of it and nonchalantly attempts to walk away. Except he is prevented. At that very same moment hundreds of pigeons appear from the sky and land in front of Lionel. Feeling the situation is steadily getting out of control, Lionel wisely takes off running down the street. Moments later the flock of pigeons take to the air, and form a colossal pigeon; it ambushes Lionel Essrog. The enraged flock swiftly chase Lionel through the streets and alleyways like the hunter in a game of hide and seek.

Finally, the mega-pigeon corners Lionel. The flock disperses from the huge form and land again in front of Lionel. With no escape, Lionel pleads with the flock. Aptly the pigeons are able to illustrate what has upset them, and once Lionel realizes his mistake, they release him. Lionel properly tosses his napkin into the trash and the statue returns to an inanimate object.

Thesis statement: Digital compositing is a new kind of realism, which creates the perception of something that could have happened, although it really could not.

I think what this story has that the other one did not is 1) context within the conflict. You have nature fighting back against human negligence. Furthermore, 2) there's irony. Pigeons have the label for being called "rats with wings". While I could not agree more, I feel its more significant for the protagonist to be something that contradicts that stereotype.